文中词汇表达较丰富恰当,但高级词汇稍显不足;正确句子比例很高,但需多多加强从句的使用;连接词过少,建议增加衔接词汇的积累。
One possible version: Pen pal wanted Hello, my name is Lucy King. I come from the UK and I can speak English. I want a pen pal in China. I think China is a beautiful country. I’m 13 years old and my birthday is in December. I have a little dog named Coco. I like playing sports and listening to the music. On weekends, I often go to the movies with my parents. Please write and tell me about yourself.