文中词汇表达比较多样,能多用高级词汇就更好了;若加强一些复杂句和从句的使用,文章会更棒;语言不流畅。
Sam got up at six o'clock in the morning yesterday. He went to the park by bike. He had a good time in the park. He had lunch with his parents in McDonald's at noon. In the afternoon Sam played basketball with his classmates in the school. They played it from 4:00 p.m. till 6:00 p.m. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father. His father bought a classic music CD for him. What an interesting day Sam had!