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Sam get up at six o'colock.NExt go to the park by bike ,he is happy in park.The noo eat at McDonald's with his parents.the afternoon play the basketball with his classmate,form four p.m. to six p.m. .after dinner,go for a walk with father ,his dad buy CD to he .Sam's day is intresting