增加一些从句的使用,文章会更棒;文中有较多拼写错误,请作者增加词汇量的积累;结构不严谨,行文不流畅。
Sam goes to bed at six o'clock yesterday,then ride his bike to park,he have a good time .he and his partents dinnes in McDonald's at noon.Sam and his classmate played basketball in the afternoon,from four to six .after supper,sam and his father goes for a walk,his father buyed a musicall CD for his.Interesting day!