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Sam is a student. Sam got up at six clock yesterday ,then he ride bike went to park . He play with his friend and he enjoys this time in park.Sam and his parents went to McDonald's have them lunch. After lunch Sam and his classmate played basketball in their school,they were very happied, they were played long time from four o'clock until six o'clock. After dinner, Sam with his father go for a work , later his father bought a classic CD as gift sent Sam. what a interested day