采用了适当的衔接手法,层次清晰;从句使用很不错,再接再厉;作者能较熟练地使用一定的高级词汇,但拼写方面要再接再厉。
The offical want to find a good revolution way to prevent graffiti on the famous Great wall. I have been to the Great wall at Badaling in Beijing and I have seen more graffitis on the bricks of the Great wall, there are most of tourists' name or other words. I think that it is not civilizion actions to destroy historic things, so all of us should refuse this actions. I agree that the administor built a fack part of the Great wall to release touristor need what they want to leave somethings but I am aginst to accept so high price, because most of visitors would like to pay money for carving there name on fack bricks. Therefore they must secretly carve on the real structure.So I suggest to cancel that fee or the people can pay little money for carving.