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Playing football is my favourite hobby.I loved playing football by cahnce.I get a fotball when i was way home then i played with my friendws.After that i really loved playing football.I often pracitse and watch matches with my classmates.My favourite football star is Beckham who comes from England.The biggest dream of my is to be a professional football player.