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hello everyone i'm lucy 13-years-old. i'm from UK.My country is talking English. I have a lot of hobbies.Such as sports.music.and movies.but basketaball is my favorite sports. I usually with my friends to go to play on the sunday. I like China culture. mountain lake and food. so i want to find a Chinese girl.she can teacher me China lunguage. If you have common hobbies with me.I'm to be honor with you become a friendship what a appriciate