结构良好,但是语言不流畅;请作者增加词汇丰富度,同时仔细检查单词拼写;句法欠规范,多多加强从句的练习。
our monitor my monitor is a good girl , she is wen wen .she is 14,she like red and black . she is very fridnly ,and she usually want help others .as she best friends i was happy. and she is our little teacher because she offten teach our english