文中词汇使用较丰富恰当,但高级词汇表达还需要很大提升;作者应增加文中长句和从句和使用;文章结构欠严谨,基本没有衔接成分。
Sam got up six o'clock yesterday morning. After that, he rode his bike to the park, and he had great fun playing at there. At noon, he had lunch in McDonald's with his parents, and then he played basketball from four to six with his classmates. He had a relaxing time. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father. His father bought a classical CD for him. He was very happy because he enjoy music very much. What a happy day he had.