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This is Tom rules,Tom get up at 6:00 everyday,finish all work,he goes to school at 6:15, he is a very good man,he doesn't eat outside,he think eat outside is very insanitation ,and he is a good student,he doesn't listen to music on school days,doesn't watch TV on school night,he thinks student should study first the work, everyday he back home by 12:00 in the morning and by 9:20 in the evening.