单词拼写做的很棒,还请注意增加词汇的积累;熟练的采用了一些从句;不能熟练使用过渡词,基本没有衔接词;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
Do you have dreams?what's your dream?When you group up,what do you want to do?i believe you have many dream,are you ready for your dream?I think some people want to be a doctor,he think this work will make much money,some people want to be a writer and make the writing,Every people have yourself dream,and i do?I want to be a teacher,I like teaching child, i think they'er very cute,every day see them i feel very very happy,I will teaching they a lot of,i will tell them:how to study,how to be a person,how to change yourself life.