请作者增加高级词汇的使用,不过单词拼写做的很好;从句使用量不足;衔接成分偏少。
Today is my busy day.today ,we have a trip to aquarium. I get up very easily after my breakfast I go to school,at 8:30 we are taking a school bus ,almost one hour,we arrived here,the aquarium is a big place .we visited kinds of fishes and creatures at here.in outdoor, we also see dolphin,penguin, ,sea lion.we are happiest thing that we watch a 4D movie ,the movie is very interesting, wear the glasses,our feelings like get into ocean it's a wonderful things.almost two hours we are going to return to school.today is busy day and a happy day!