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Sam got up at six yesterday。then he rode his bick go to park. He has very fun.Afternoon he and his father eat McDonald‘s . Sam and his classroom play baskerball from at four to till six. After dinner . Sam and his father have go for a walk. His father buy CD for his. Have a good fun for Sam!