增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;文中词汇表达不够丰富,高级词汇方面要多累积;语言不流畅。
Sam got up at 6:00AM yesterday,and then,he went to park by bike.He had a good time. Sam had lunch with his parents at McDonald's.Afternoon,he played basketball with his classmates till 18:00 in their school. After super,he and his father went for a walk.His father bought a calsical CDfor him.How funny a day!