文中从句数量过少;文章词汇表达要更加熟练,希望能更多使用一些高级词汇;层次不清晰,几乎没有使用衔接词。
Sam waked up at 6 pm on the last day.Then he has drive a bicycle to the park and playing fun. He with his parents ate lunch on McDonali`s in the afternoon. In the afternoon,Sam with his classmate playing basketball for at 4 pm until 6pm. Sam and his father go for a walk after the dinner time, his father by a classical music CD to him. This is the day!