文章词汇表达要更加熟练,希望能更多使用一些高级词汇;增加一些从句的使用,文章会更不错;语言不流畅。
One possible version: Pen pal wanted Hello!My name is Lucy King.I am a girl.I am 13 years old.I from the UK. I can speak English.I am a student.I have many hobbies.I like sports and listen to music ,watch movies.I like China.I want learn about China.I need a Pen pal wanted.I need a girl. Please write and tell me about yourself.