文中从句数量过少;拼写很棒,可适当增加高级词汇的使用;全文结构较为严谨,应适当增加文中衔接词的使用。
Sam wakes up at six o'clock yesterday, after that he was ride bike to the park, he was happy. At noon with parents have lunch at McDonald's. Then after, Sam was playing basket ball with his classmate from 4pm till 6pm in the afternoon. After dinner, Sam and father go for a walk and father brought him a classical CD. How wonderful was Sam yesterday?