2012年6月英语四级作文真题:过度包装的现象

文中词汇表达不够丰富，要多积累学术词汇；正确句子比例较高，适当增加复杂句的使用，文章会更出色；文章结构不够严谨，应增加过程性词汇的使用。

Nowadays, more and more goods are packed excessively. The reason why the goods are packaged excessively is that it can bring the sellers more margine profits. Does the customers need the packaging or the goods itself? Obviously, it is the goods. Usually, goods which were packaged excessively are often overpriced. It costs customers more money. It is no use for them. So, we should not select those goods which are on excessive packaging.