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yestoday,sam waken up on 6am. and go park by cycle.he have fun very happy in park. afternoon, sam play baskboot with your clssmate in school. sam go gor awald with father. he father buy a CD for him .today sam have a good time.Sam got up at six clock and then went to park by bike