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Everyday,Tom's get up at 6.00.after then ,him go to school at 6.15. Tom have a good rules. for example in the morring. he don't eat outside. he never don't listen to music on school days. at noon , he be back home bu 12.00 in the morrning ,afternoon ,he ride bike go to school. he can go home . at evening . he don's awtch Tv on chool .And he get bed at the 9;20 .this is tom's rules. the rules is very good.