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Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday. Then he go to park by bike. He played happily in park. At noon, he had a lunch with his parents. In the afternoon, Sam and his classmates played basketball at school from 16 o'clock till 18 o'clock. After supper, sam went for a walk with father. He father bought a classic music CD for him. What a interesting day Sam have.