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sam get bed at six a/lock on yesterday then rode a bike went to park he plays well in park lunch with present in mc donald/s ate lunch parents.) In the afternoon,he palyed basketball with his classmates from 4pm to 6pm.After dinner, sam went for a walk with his father,and his father buy a CD to him in the during.What's a funny day!