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Sam waked up at Six Oclock' in the morning yestoday. And then he drived bicycle go to partern. He was playing so happy in the gardern. Midday, he and his parrens had have lanch. From four Oclock' untill six Oclock' at the afternoon, Sam and his classmates were playing baskeball at school. After the dinner, Sam and his father go for a walk, his father bough a piece of classic music CD sended to him. Sam passed a beautyful day!
