拼写很棒,可适当增加学术词汇的使用;句法知识很棒,若增加一些从句的使用,文章会更出色;上下文衔接不流畅,文章结构不严谨。
My favorite sport is football. Football is a combination of power and speed which also calls for passion and team spirit. Nevertheless none of these is the real reason that I'm hooked by football. I fall in love with football by accident. One day I picked a football by chance on my way home, then I played with my friends, from then on I was deeply in love with football. Now I am a member of our school team. So I am always training with my classmates and match with other school teams. I'm one of the best football players in our school. Of course, watching football game is one of the most attractive entertainment for us. I prefer watching premier league to others. My favorite football star is Britain's David Beckham. I hope one day I can become a professional football player like him.