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Hello,everyone,our school will hold a meeting in the topic of China Spaceflight.In order to let us know about China Spaceflight,we invite speaker professor Li who taught in Peiking Univercity.We made time on May1 Thursday 2:30p.m,the place is our school's lecture Hall,this topic is attract the background of spaceflight,China astronaut and process.we hope our students who were interested in spaceflight can listen this topic,thanks!