文中词汇表达稍欠丰富,但单词拼写做的很棒;过渡词很丰富,衔接词同时使用的恰到好处;句式灵活多变,再加强从句的使用会更棒;请注意分段。
My favorite sport My favorite sport is play football.In fact,I love football by chance,one day,I picked a ball when I came back home,I plan to play football with my friends,since then,I am fall love with it.So,I often play football with my friends and classmates,my favorite football player is Back Ham,I dream about to be a professional football player.My good friend Mike also like football,so we often talk about watch and goal,he likes Ka Ka,he play football as well Back Ham.My favorite sport is football,what about you?