单词拼写做的不错,文中词汇表达贫乏;加强一些长句和复杂句的使用;结构不严谨,行文不流畅;请注意分段;可以适当增加副词的使用;连词使用偏少。
Sam got up at six yesterday.Then he went to park by bike,he had a good time.He had lunch with his parents at McDonald’s.From 4p.m to 6p.m he played basketball with his classmate.After supper,he went for a walk with his father.His father bought a Classical CD for him.It's a very interesting day for Sam.