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Sam got up at 6 o'clock. Then he went to the park by bike.He played so happy in the park.He had lunch with his parents in McDonald's at noon.Sam and his classmates played basketball in the school from 4 o'clock till 6 o'clock this afternoon.Sam and his father went for a walk after dinner. His father bought a musical CD for him.How fun is Sam all the day!