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Sam got up at 6 o'clock yesterday. Then he went to the park by bike that played so happy.At noon he had lunch with his parents in McDonald's.Sam played basketball with his classmates in the school from 4 PM till 6 PM. His father bought a musical CD for him when they went for a walk after dinner.How fun is Sam all day!