单词拼写做的很棒,还请注意增加词汇的积累;简单句型过多,从句使用不熟练;不能熟练使用过渡词,文章结构不严谨;请注意分段;连词使用偏少。
Yesterday Sam got up at six and then ride to garden.He was exciting to play football with his father.he ate lunch together with his parents in McDonald's.This afternoon Sam and his classmates played basketball at school till six.After supper Sam go for a walk with his father and his father bought a CD for him. What a good day!