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yesterday, Sam got up at six a clock. then he rode his bicycle went to the garden, he was very happy in the garden. in the afternoon he with his parents went to the McDonald's for lunch. at pm Sam play basketball with his classmate, from four pm till six pm. after dinner, Sam go for a walk with his father, his father bought a classical music CD to him. what this day so much fun Sam is!