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Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday morning.Then went to park by bike.He played funny.He ate McDonald's with his family together at lunch.Sam with his classmate played basketball,from 4 p.m untill 6 p.m.after dinner,Sam went for a walk with his father togeter.His father bought a classical music CD for he.What a funny day sam had!