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Personal speaking, I have a beautiful home. My family has eight people, my grandparents, parents, two younger brothers, a younger sister and I. We live in our new house together,which has two floors, a big window and many small widows, they are classic. What' s more, everybody of us has a bedroom,which was decorated by ourselves. I love my home!