希望作者可以加强词汇表达多样性,尤其是学术词汇的积累;正确句子比例较高,适当增加复杂句的使用,文章会更出色;文章层次不够分明,缺少组织,需注意文章整体的组织结构。
Our eyes is very important.We can see many beautiful things with our eyes.Without eyes the life will get dark.So we must protect our eyes. To protect our eyes,first we shouldn't read books or magazines too long.We can stop for a while to let our eyes have a rest.During these time,we can enjoy the hills,flowers,trees.Then we shouldn't read books under the strong lights or weak lights.It's bad for our eyes.At last,we should keep doing the eye exercise. Let's protect our eyes,see more beautiful things.