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Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday. then went to park by bike, he enjoyed himself in the park. He had lunch with his parents at the McDonakd's. In the afternoon, Sam and his schoolmate played basketball in the school, they played basketball form 4 o'clock till six o'colck. Sam and hia father went for a walk after dinner, his father bought a classical music CD for him. Sam had a interesting time!