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Sam got up at 6 o'clock yesterday.Then he went to the park by bicycle, he was enjoy himself at the park. At the noon, Sam and his parents had lunch at McDonald's.In the afternoon, he and his classmate played basketball from 4 o'clock till 6 o'clock.after the dinner, Sam and his farther go for a walk together,and his farther bought a class music CD to him.Sam felt very funny this day.