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today it is a fine. i am going to a park with my parent. so, i got up early at six in the moring. we left home and ride bike to the park. there are many people here. some of them are flying a kite, some of person are playing, they are laughing. I and my parent walk along the lake, and reaching a quirt place to sit there and small talk with each other. it is time to fly. it is noon. we went to fast restaurant. finish my lunch i went to my friend and play football together till four.