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Tom's rules Tom made a great decision. He must to strive changing himself. he told himself i should get up at six everyday and leave home to go to school at six-fifteen. befor he likes eat out, it bad for his health. now he ruled don't eat outside. it seems that he can save a lot of money and buy other necessary thing for his parent who are birthday party. during school he doesn't listen to music and watch TV from monday to friday. he must be to back home at twelve for his lunch. in the evening he does his homework and then goes to bed at nine-twenty.
