熟练的采用了一些从句;层次欠清晰;请作者增加词汇表达的丰富度,对拼写检查也要重视;请注意分段。
First I think we have to keep away from the book,TV and computer.If you read a book please set in the light room don't read book in the dirk room.Then when you watch the TV,suffer the Internet or read book don't keep whit long time If you notice this tips,you can do well to protece your eyes.