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Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday. Then he ride his bycicle to park, he enjoyed himself there. When it was noon, he had a lunch with his parents at McDonald' s. After that sam played basketball with jis classmates from 4pm till 6pm. And after dinner, he went for a walk with his farther while his farther bought a claasic music CD to him. What a wonderful day Sam had.