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Sam got up at six o'clock yesterday. Then he went to park by bike. He had a good time in the park. Soon later, he ate McDonald's with his parents at noon. In the afernoon, Sam played basketball with his classmates from pm 4 till pm 6. After dinner, Sam went for a walk with his father after. He was bought a CD by his father. What an interesting day for Sam!