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A funny day Sam got up at six yesterday.After that he went to the park by bike,he is very happy.He and his parents had lunch in McDonald's in the afternoon.Sam and his classmates played basketball from four til six in the afternoon.After supper,Sam and his father went for a walk together,his father bought a classic CD for him. What a funny day did Sam have!