采用了适当的衔接手法,层次清晰;从句使用不错,但需加强复杂句的使用;作者词汇量有些小,要注意检查拼写错误;请注意分段。
my dream i believe everyone has one or more dreams in their heart .maybe dreams are always changing during growing up.i remember i wanted to become a teacher when i was a child,but later on,i dislike being teachers ,i wanted to be a docter.but for now,i want to be a person who can speak english well