1. 描述事情经过;
2. 谈谈你的感想。
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Once upon a time,I was wandering in the street while I saw an old man suddenly fell on the ground.Without hesitation,I walked to him and tried to pull him off.Rushing to the hospital,I felt relief for saving the man's life,who got a stroke while he was alone on a street.Having knew this,his son thanked me deeply for my quick reaction and kindness.My heart abounded in happiness not only because of my movement,but also for I get to know it was strangers' care that matters.