句法知识扎实,可适当增加长句的使用;文中使用了简单的连接词和过渡词;文章词汇表达比较丰富,但学术词汇稍显欠缺,此外拼写检查要重视;请注意分段。
The same clay,someone uses it to build a worthless vase,while someone keep it still.It's a fact that we can't choose what we are given,but we can try our best to make good use of it.This reminds me of LiuWei,who lost his arm in an accident.Not giving himself up,on the countrary,he managed to use his feet to have meals,brash his teeth,get changed,and even do well in playing the piano.Being spotted,he played a song named You Are Beautiful,which succeeded in moving everyone. In conclusion,we should not complaint about what we are given,If we can make it inot what we expect.