句法知识扎实,可适当增加长句的使用;文中使用了简单的连接词和过渡词;文中词汇表达较丰富恰当,学术词汇使用稍显不足;请注意分段。
With the same clay,someone uses it to build a worthless vase,while someone keeps it still.It's a fact that we can't choose what we are given,but we can try our best to make good use of it.This reminds me of LiuWei,who lost his arm in an accident.Not giving himself up,on the countrary,he managed to use his feet to have meals,brash his teeth,get changed,and even do well in playing the piano.Being spotted,he played a song named You Are Beautiful,which succeeded in moving everyone. In conclusion,we should not complaint about what we are given,If we can make it into what we expect.