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Hello,my name is Lucy King.I'm 13 years old this year.And I'm from UK.My mother langue is English.I have some hobbies,just like sports,music,movies. Because of interesting China ,I want to know more about it.I want to study Chinese. If you are a girl,and have the similar habbies with me,Would you like to be my penfrend?I really enjoy making frends.