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Sam got up at 6 o'clock yesterday. Then he went to the park by bicycle, where he had a good time. At noon he and his parents had lunch at McDonald's. In the afternoon he and his classmates played basketball from 4 P.M till 6 P.M. at school. After supper, he and his father went for a walk. His father bought him a disk of classical music. What an interesting day sam had !