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Sam got up at 6 o'clock yesterday morning. He rode his bicycle to the park. In the park he had great fun. At noon he had lunch in the McDonald's with his parents. In the afternoon, he played basketball with his classmates from four till six. After dinner, he went for a walk with his fater. His father bought him a classical music CD. How glad he was! He loved music so much!